Writing 201: Poetry #3 – Skin

Those familiar longing pangs, felt in the gut, the heart, rattling the bars. The body’s wants physical, tangible, pulling. An itch that must be scratched. Β The devil’s dance.

I find a quiet corner, the better to savour the warmth of ritual, the tap-tap foreplay, all anticipation.

Sharp scratch. The needle. The skin. The darkness slips in.

 

 

 

This was written for day 3 of Writing 201: Poetry, using the prompts of skin/ prose poetry/ internal rhyme. This is well beyond my comfort zone, so any feedback welcome πŸ™‚

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Author: Al Lane

Writer, Poet, Daydreamer

29 thoughts on “Writing 201: Poetry #3 – Skin”

  1. very expressive, one can almost feel the point of the needle
    good work. I know what you mean about being out of your comfort zone…I read the instructions for the days poem and say “huh?” and then just jump in and write something…even if its bad. πŸ™‚

      1. indeed, half the fun of poetry is filling in words in an appropriate form. I don’t think of it as failure, just that sometimes the words fall flat. I wait to post until I have something that I like, if it doesn’t “ring” when I read it outloud it needs changes. πŸ™‚

  2. Wow! Well Al, I think you should write out of your comfort zone more often! This is thought provoking, dark, the “devil’s dance” indeed. And you’ve added sounds to the visual: tap tap, rattling, sibilant “sharp scratch”. Excellent! You’ve described this person…..and the act……and the feeling.
    Looking forward to seeing more of your work in Writing 201!
    Interesting that we both wrote a “character study” of sorts with this prose assignment.

  3. As someone who has been clean and sober for nigh on a decade… you rocked this as though you had been there yourself! Bravo!!

    1. I meant to say that as I am someone who… never meaning to imply that you ever walked such a hideous path yourself… I was not into the needle but I have lost many who were.

      1. No need to clarify – I understand πŸ™‚ I have been spared any personal insight into this topic, so this was just me trying to put myself into that particular mindset. And well done on staying sober! πŸ™‚

        1. Cool. Yes, it’s a very different world but I like it here and I am ever so grateful for each new day!

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